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15/11/2019 13:11

I don't know how to feel about this one. It's a bit too high at the end! But I kind of like that? It's got a bit of charm to it being in a higher range.

So, guys! :D I have something a bit different for my description today! I feel it's common knowledge at this point that I tend to enjoy making up stories. And i'm going to talk about one of my stories today, but it's not even a pitch. It's in development! And it's making me realize just how bad my spelling truly is! XD
This is part of what I've wrote already, it might change, might not. I just don't feel a connection with some of the names and such. But if any of you would like to see it more in detail, such as with the characters and such, here's a link.
(Not recommended!) XD

"A world, Hanbano. Presumed to be, once a world of beauty, now a world of sand and sea. The small planet's moon was large enough to block the sun for decades. If not far longer. An eternal eclipse. Leaving the world to adapt to it's new conditions. For better, or worse.
The world fell apart.
But as all things will do, the world adapted. The people made the best of what they had. And the world didn't leave the people, truly, in the dark.
"Starworms." A type of glowing water dwelling bug with bioluminescene, rumored to have magic inside their shell's, due to the evidence of life around the ponds they inhabit. They live in the water, and in the water far beneath the ground. Along with the "Starworms of the sky". A flying bug with a far fainter glow. rumored to be the souls of the dead. Other than stars themselves, they were the world's only source of light.
"GlowCo." A company made for harvesting the Starworms. GlowCo took the Starworms and turned them into lights. GlowCo knew the world relied on their lights. Crazy with power, GlowCo charged great deals of pearls for their lights. Some people seen the damage it was doing, to the world, to the people, to the starworms themselves. And retaliated. They started wearing masks on one half of their face, so when there was no light, one eye would be adjusted to the darkness. The people who could afford lights rejected those with masks, and started calling them, "Off Ones". For they're seemingly "Off" logic.
The Off Ones relied on the many small bodies of water about the world for light. Along with the deemed, deadly source, that was fire. The people lived in one city, but not together. Most "Without Masks" were anything and everything they dreamed of, while the Off Ones often became merchants.
GlowCo was not fond of the Off Ones, They decided that if there is no natural light then they too, would have to buy their lights. GlowCo destroyed the city. And everything around it. Many things relied on the Starworms, they depleted too much, too fast. And destroyed that portion of the world. Those Without Masks moved on, and made a new city. While the Off Ones stayed.
They wouldn't let GlowCo win. They stayed in and throughout the chaos. Their masks let them see, they weren't afraid to use fire as light. Both, something GlowCo couldn't do a thing about.
With a old city in ruins and a new city on the rise, The two groups got farther apart with growing darkness in the world. And in their hearts."

I hope everyone's having a great day!

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conesent on Nov. 16, 2019, 9:33 a.m.


Grey on Nov. 16, 2019, 1:49 p.m.

It's so interesting to finally be able to read more about the characters. Seriously, I frickin' love this. I'm so intrigued XD
And I like the melody too by the way. It's really calming honestly.

..also, might be a weird question, but what does the buildings and cities look like?
If you don't mind me asking, that is..?

Kaleidiope on Nov. 16, 2019, 3:31 p.m.

Thank-you, guys! (*´꒳`*)

Kaleidiope on Nov. 16, 2019, 4:34 p.m.

And it's not a weird question at all! As for, it's a question i'm still asking myself! XD

Beryl is a city that was more or less flipped up-side down from the ground up. So I imagine Beryl's buildings not having windows? Nor doors on the inside? I feel glass would be a hard thing to come by, because the whole city is built from what remained from the old city that got destroyed by GlowCo. And I can't see glass surviving it? While Jade has made new glass, and mostly new everything. I can see them both being small cities, but Jade is more of a sci-fi looking place, with metal and glass, paved paths, most likely in stone? At least multiple stories for each building? (Five or so?) And buildings that aren't just houses, there'd be businesses and stores. They'd be small, like the kind you would find in games like harvest moon. But they'd still be stores?
While Beryl is more made with saved pieces of the old buildings, warped wood and scrap metal. Fabric curtains doors on the inside of houses instead of real doors because not enough resources to waste on the inside? And you really can only get things from other merchants, the only buildings would be houses, and the rest would be carts, and rubble no one knows what to do with? And, this might sound silly? But I imagine the interiors looking a lot like gypsy carts! XD

Since Beryl mainly is a city of merchants, I can see a lot of people just living in the carts they use for travel? And I see those looking a bit like gypsy carts. And if that's what they look like, I can see it becoming a normal style for that city, and people having that same style in their houses to?

I can also see i being a bit cold? No sun after all. And in Beryl a lot of resources go to keeping warm, and making houses stay warm. While in Jade, it's what GlowCo says. They tried to run Beryl, too. But failed. (But they did make life harder for them.) Beryl's the kind of city where everyone knows everyone. Maybe not by name, but is aware of each other? While Jade honesty couldn't care? If the people care or not, it doesn't matter. They can't.
One main thing is this story starts in Beryl, and Jade is talked up about being a great city, far better than Beryl! But it's just bigger and more proper looking. They made what was needed instead of dealing with what was there.

The main thing I can see, is the trading square. It'll be a long path that leads into Beryl that most merchants set up shop in after returning from the out-skirts. To sell what they have gotten from the out-skirts. And I would like to sketch up something to show the trading square. But that's just what it would be, a sketch! XD And a rough one at that! I will be doing a few, and I have done a few, but it just feel strange putting them out?
Also, I know this was kind of all over the place! So feel free to ask for more detail, or more about anything, really! (I just don't feel that I said anything that would help with visualizing the cities!) XD

Kaleidiope on Nov. 16, 2019, 7:05 p.m.

I also see most of Jade's buildings to be more like apartments? And that the cities are circular, they both started in one spot, and grew outward. So a circle/oval type shape. And I see Jade being small, but tall. I once said in the story that there's roads in the sky. Because GlowCo needs the ground, so the sky is the best place for living. And Beryl would be more spread out. They're homes would be buildings that look a lot like what's in Jade right now, just broken down, falling apart, and put together with what they could find. Beryl doesn't have enough resources and GlowCo didn't leave them with enough to ever make things they need. But it's larger in space due more people used to be there. Beryl having more of a broken down stone building look, patched up with random bits they took from buildings they thought were too far gone to try to patch up. While Jade is more windows and metal, and smaller housing. Space is everywhere in Beryl while Jade is crunched for space.

Grey on Nov. 16, 2019, 8:51 p.m.

That's so interesting! And I love the gypsy cart interior idea.
It seems to fit the world perfectly honestly.
Also, even if it's a "rough sketch" as you call it, please do draw more of your world and your characters (if you feel like it). Your latest drawing of Tal and Indigo is absolutely beautiful so don't hesitate on your drawing skills for even a second. Seriously.
I was wondering..
This is a little bit out of the blue, but will there be some sort of steampunk vibe to the world?
Will there be lots o machinery or... something else, I guess..? XD
(Sorry if I'm too curious)

Kaleidiope on Nov. 17, 2019, 3:11 p.m.

Thank-you! ^-^ I haven't put out any of the world, because i'm really bad with perspective drawing! XD But I do want to do animals, the world, people, but it would just be sketches? I don't think i'd color them? But i'm unsure about it?

It's going to be fairly steampunk-ish style in Jade, a clockpunk and steampunk type style. (But a little less copper, and a bit more shiny type of metal in Jade? At least when it comes to buildings.) I don't see a lot of machines, but I do imagine there being a lot in Jade. Because, I have this Idea that Starworms would act a lot like a power source? But it's just a power source that doesn't last long. I once said in the story that the starworm lights will burn out half way through the day. Which is why Umber made a light, to have a more reliable light and power source. And I feel clock work would also be a thing, it's just not a very common thing? But people like Indigo, that's their trade, they would work with clockwork.

This was started because I wanted to make something with things I like: I like space, so a large base of the story is with the moon, and that the stars and the night sky would always be seen. I like steampunk, so the idea of things running with clockwork, and other things that are common in that theme, is how the world runs. And I don't like drawing both sides of the face, so they get masks. XD
When I started this, I was playing games like One shot, deiland, and moon lighter, those have become some of my favorite games, and I loved the feeling they gave me while I was playing them. (And they're partly to blame on the whole, cloak, scarf, broken down buildings, water, and gypsy-trader-cart vibe.)
I see Beryl being more broken down stone buildings, while jade has the more steampunk, glass and metal look. The reason Beryl still is broken down, even though it's been a long time since it was destroyed. Is that it's so far gone, no one can get anything to make things that they would need to build it back up. So all they have is clockwork. I once, in the story said how important metal is in Beryl, and how it mustn't be wasted.

So, yep! I like it too much not to! XD

conesent on Nov. 17, 2019, 3:30 p.m.


conesent on Nov. 17, 2019, 3:30 p.m.

oh no not again

Kaleidiope on Nov. 17, 2019, 4:04 p.m.

NO!! Kagamine Len, don't do it!!
Don't self destruct!! XD

conesent on Nov. 18, 2019, 1:13 p.m.

thats something i'd never think i'd hear in my life
but im ok now
i understand why you use these long comments

conesent on Nov. 18, 2019, 1:13 p.m.

cant put a novel into two sentences, after all

Kaleidiope on Nov. 18, 2019, 7:09 p.m.

True, true!
But, please. Don't ever explode!!! XD
That would be too sad!!

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